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Peer Review Reflection

I have just recieved my asessment from my peer and learned new ways to improve my essay.  First I need to suport my thesis better in using more information and detail from Edmunson’s essay on college students.  I also believe that my thesis isn’t as strong as it could be.  Making it more clear on my argument I am trying to present will help my audience a lot.  The last thing I need to work on is my title with out a good title you will never really get the reader enagaged in your writing.